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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within a family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

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Nowadays, some
people
 believe that the best type of setup for a business is creating a job within the family,
this
 essay will check the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 topic. On the one hand,
this
 paragraph will examine the benefits of
this
 subject,
this
 is a very good trend,
furthermore
,
this
 happens is very rare that to be possible
people
 can run a job within their family,
however
, there are many
people
 that have collaboration with parents, they have much calmer than another
people
,
in addition
, they are very successful in comparison to another
people
also
 they can solve it their problem to easily,
for example
, I have been worked in a big company and they do not understand anything about my problem and for
this
 reason, I had to
work
 there very hard.
On the other hand
, there are many negatives aspect, when a job became family
work
,
this
 can lead to a number of new problems,
for instance
,
people
 may do not want to serious their
work
 or they are not looking for access to their goals, for
this
 reason, they must implement a plan and have to any member use of them,
thus
, they are a witness for improving their involve, and they can enjoy of their
work
 with other family members. In conclusion.
this
 topic can be positive or negative,
this
 is related to family behaviour, and How much they respect each other, it is better they can adopt some rules among them until members notify of their role.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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