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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons? Solutions to change negative attitudes.

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It is widely argued that global
tourism
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 has a negative impact on destination resorts and countries. While there is a strong case for
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 view, solutions must be applied to resolve some of the serious issues which have arisen. There are two primary reasons why local residents often consider international
tourism
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 as a cause of serious problems in their countries. One reason is that it may have an adverse impact on traditional customs and indigenous practices, because tourists may be insensitive
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 the feelings of
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 community.
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, some Western holidaymakers visiting developing Southeast Asian countries
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maybe
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 rowdy/noisy or wear unsuitable clothes, which might have an undesirable influence on local young people who copy immodest and provocative (sexy)
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 and fashions. Another reason is that visitors often pollute or litter beauty spots and several famous beach destinations in Vietnam
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 as Cua Lo and Sam Son, have been spoiled by
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 lack of respect for the local environment. Measures must be taken by governments and international bodies to change negative attitudes.
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, the undoubted economic benefits of international
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 for local economies ought to be widely promoted through official media. Foreign tourists spend money in shops and restaurants and help create jobs in service industries and
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 aspect must be publicized. At the same time/
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, travel agencies should urge visitors to respect the traditions and culture of their hosts.
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, bodies
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 as World
Tourism
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 Organization must enforce strict regulations on the
tourism
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 industry, ensuring that local operators are responsible for clearing litter and disposing of waste in ways that do not harm the environment.
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, local authorities should launch several voluntary campaigns in which the youth in their region can get involved in doing social activities
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 as collecting and cleaning beaches. In conclusion, even though some people blame international
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 for the negative impacts on their local communities including traditional values and the environment, some measures could be done to address
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 issue in a positive change.

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