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Many people feel that media coverage has becoming increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?

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There is
rising
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number
 of arguments that nowadays
media
 are becoming less and less objective. Focusing on
this
 statement, in my essay, I am going to discuss the possible reasons for
this
 situation and attempt to offer some solutions. It cannot be denied, that
number
 of
media
 has increased enormously in recent two decades, including the social one. From one point of
view
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 it is progress, we have a vast
number
 of
a
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different kinds of
information
 from
entire
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 world- without dispute.
On the other hand
, like everything even
this
 may be the source of some issues, with which we have to deal daily. With the increasing
number
 of
media
 directly proportionally their viewership is presumably decreasing because we have many options for what to follow. Understandably, it is not linked with increasing incomes and
therefore
 the
medias
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media
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 have to create a
strategies
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 how to entice customers again. One of the possible ways how to achieve
this
 is to offer more interesting
information
.
However
,
this
 might be linked with decreasing objectivity.
Media
 are accommodating
an objective
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objective information
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information
 to make them more attractive to users.
Moreover
, there are people who enjoy releasing incorrect
information
, which may be attractive for certain types of people and
subsequently
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 there are gathering still more followers on social
media
 and they have higher incomes. Moving to the solutions, we have different options. Governments should decrease or at least regulate the
number
 of
media
.
Additionally
, the content of
media
 should be examined before publishing.
In addition
, there should be restrictions about which kind of
information
 is certain
media
 allowed to work with.
With
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 the most important
ones
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 only official
media
 controlled by the government should work with. In nutshell, there are different sources of
this
 issue including earning money and prestige.
Nevertheless
, we have different options
how
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 to solve
this
, but the government must engage in
this
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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