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Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds ? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #resources #attention #protection #animals #birds
Animals
 have always had a crucial role in
human’s
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human
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 life.
Accordingly
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 there is an opinion asserting that a wide range of attention and resources have been dedicated to
protect
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protecting
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animals
 which are wild and
also
,
birds
. Personally, I disagree with
this
 statement and in
this
essay
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 I will give reasons. Prior to all, there are a plethora of wild
animals
in
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 risk of extinction. As in fashion luxurious clothing tools are very popular all over the world, numerous
animals
 have been pried and killed in order to use their skin for producing nags and shoes.
For instance
, in
Milan
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 fashion shows clothes and bags made of snake or
bear skin
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bearskin
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 can be witnessed. The reason why these
animals
 have been killed is due to
lack
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a lack
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 of
protecting
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protection
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regions in which wild
animals
 have been living.
In addition
, a vast majority of
birds
 are pried to be sold as pets. Needless to say that while
birds
 need to live in nature, they are pried by predators because of
high
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the high
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 profits that
black
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the black
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 market
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apply
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of
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or
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sell
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sells
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in
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apply
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special
birds
have
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apply
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.
For instance
, rich people have a tendency to have colourful
parots
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parrots
parts
parents
 that can talk.
as a result
, predators go to African regions in which these
birds
 can be found. After preying, sell them
in
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at
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 high prices to rich people. If preying
these
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on these
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specious
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species
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 was banned by the government, predators could not sell them, so it is clear that no source or focus
were
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 dedicated to
this
 issue. To conclude, there are a wide number of wild
animals
 in danger of being pried and
then
 killed for producing bags, shoes as well as clothes ,
also
birds
 are usually sold in cages to rich people
that is
 why from my point of view, not any source or focus have been spent to protect
animals
 and
birds
.
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