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Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Education
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 is essential for everyone. Some educational institutes run a
gender
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-based schooling system;
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, many others think that
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education
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 is good for our society. I believe that the
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 system is the best. The
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education
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 method gives better
education
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. It not only increases the students' knowledge but
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 improves their confidence level because they know their opposite
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 very well. It helps to reduce their shyness and increase their conviction. The
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education
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 gives a better understanding of the opposite
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. It assists in their personal and professional life.
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, there is healthier competition between them,
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 as sports, getting more marks, participating in cultural programmes, and many others. They help and protect each other.
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, it has a few drawbacks: students should not take advantage of the opposite
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.
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, some people believe that separate or single-
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education
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 is the best. In our society, most probably parents choose their children's school, and a significant priority is
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safety, especially for their girl child. So they blindly choose single-sex schooling. Another possibility is that boys' schools prefer sports and girls' schools focus on indoor activities. Even though there are some limitations,
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 as feeling more nervous when they meet or do some work together, there is no change in understanding the opposite
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's feelings and emotions. In conclusion, boys and girls both are part of
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 world, so we don't want to separate them for an
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. So I choose
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education
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 could bring more advantages to students and help them succeed when they have to enter adult life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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