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Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Education
 is essential for everyone. Some educational institutes run a
gender
-based schooling system;
however
, many others think that
co-
education
 is good for our society. I believe that the
co-
education
 system is the best. The
co-
education
 method gives better
education
. It not only increases the students' knowledge but
also
 improves their confidence level because they know their opposite
gender
 very well. It helps to reduce their shyness and increase their conviction. The
co-
education
 gives a better understanding of the opposite
gender
. It assists in their personal and professional life.
For example
, there is healthier competition between them,
such
 as sports, getting more marks, participating in cultural programmes, and many others. They help and protect each other.
Moreover
, it has a few drawbacks: students should not take advantage of the opposite
gender
.
On the other hand
, some people believe that separate or single-
gender
education
 is the best. In our society, most probably parents choose their children's school, and a significant priority is
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safety, especially for their girl child. So they blindly choose single-sex schooling. Another possibility is that boys' schools prefer sports and girls' schools focus on indoor activities. Even though there are some limitations,
such
 as feeling more nervous when they meet or do some work together, there is no change in understanding the opposite
gender
's feelings and emotions. In conclusion, boys and girls both are part of
this
 world, so we don't want to separate them for an
education
. So I choose
co-
education
 could bring more advantages to students and help them succeed when they have to enter adult life.
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  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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