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Many would argue that scientific research requires a degree of oversight from the relevant governmental authorities. In my opinion, properly handled, this is a sensible and necessary policy. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Many argue that scientific research requires the supervision of relevant
government
 agencies. I think it's the right policy when it's done right. We will consider the advantage and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 in
this
 essay On the one
hand
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 there are some logical reasons for the advantages of
this
 approach.If the
government
 sponsors
scientists
 and provides them with all the necessary tools, the scientific
work
 of
scientists
 will be more accurate and useful.
For example
, I am a scientist and I am doing scientific
work
, if I have everything I need, I will not face any difficulties and my scientific
work
 will be completed successfully.
On the other hand
, some people have a negative opinion.
Initially
, it was believed that the
government
 could restrict the freedom of
scientists
 during scientific
work
.
Therefore
, the restrictions imposed by the
government
 will definitely undermine its self-esteem.
Moreover
, in
such
 conditions,
scientists
 may not feel comfortable, and may even be forced to
work
 with unknown colleagues, which leads to undesirable consequences To summarize, it is generally known that any researcher being under the control of a specific organization can have numerous benefits
in contrast
 to its drawbacks. I have personally convinced that cooperation with a company or an organization especially in significant projects can lead to realistic results.
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