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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Maintaining by many people in the society is that high school should provide obligatorily free services for the community to build a good society as well as opportunity to earn practical knowledge by the student doing
this
. Though
this
 has some merits and demerits. In my point of view, I strongly agree that
students
 should involve in doing
this
 activity for preparing themselves for the future workplace. To commence with, in Bangladesh, our society and dwellers’ attitudes are changing adversely.
For example
, during the Eid festival in my countryside area, a brawl happened between two neighbours which led to one person being killed. So pupils should help to enhance the bonding of the neighbourhood which reduces hostile mentality, aid the destitute people, and make friendly relationships with younger teaching games.
Then
, by engaging in these
activities
,
students
 learn teamwork, leadership hard work, build empathy, and communication skills, even introverted
students
 would be extroverts, which is extremely helpful as extracurricular
activities
 to get a good job.
In addition
, servicing the community, like teaching play games, is fruitful for
students
 to maintain good health as well as to keep away from bad
activities
,
such
 as video games and addiction to narcotics. High school learners can find their aim in life by doing various work for charity and good connections with neighbours. In conclusion, though these social
activities
 kill lots of time and less focus to get other subject preparation for the
students
, I believe
this
 service makes them self-confident and its benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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