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the following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in Dubi in recent decades. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make commparisons where relavant.

the following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in Dubi in recent decades. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make commparisons where relavant.
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This
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These
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 two
maps
 illustrate changes
of
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in
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Clock
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the Clock
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 Tower Roundabout of Dubai from the past to
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the present-day
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present-day
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present day
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.
It is clear that
this
 area has undergone significant changes.
Overall
,
the
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apply
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most parts of the area have been modernized,
in particular
, many skyscrapers have been built and replaced green space,
in addition
desert
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to desert
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. One of the most changes in
the
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apply
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recent decades is that the skyscrapers have been expanded around the Clock Tower Roundabout.
Furthermore
, it has become
more
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busier, today.
Moreover
, the population has climbed dramatically and the number of cars and drivers has increased. In both
maps
, what has remained the same is the Clock Tower in the middle of the Roundabout.
Although
 a few trees have been planted around it.
Also
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,Also
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 you can see
small
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the small
a small
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 and similar desert
area
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areas
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 at the bottom of the
maps
. The other thing that has remained the same is the one of the
skyscraper
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skyscrapers
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in
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on
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 the right of the
maps
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words maps with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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