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In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Many people find themself with very little
leisure
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time
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, the constraint of studying hard has taken a toll on
youths
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 without giving enough
time
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 for
leisure
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 activities. On the one hand, many people find the education system very competitive and the
pressure
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 of studying hard,to get a passing grade or to get into university.
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, the lack of money in the family can be very hard on the
youth
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this
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 can prevent them from making friends and enjoying their free
time
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 because of too much studying and the
pressure
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 from parents.
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, for
youth
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 from a low-income community, the family will find it hard to provide without the help of social assistance.And
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 can cause
pressure
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 on the
youths
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 they have to achieve to help their family. To add, because the surroundings will prevent
youth
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 from enjoying socializing with neighbours and schoolmates the burden to study and leave home to find better surroundings .
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, the Education system can be changed to ensure less
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 is not put on the
youth
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 to achieve certain standards.
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, counselling can help the
youth
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 to be prepared and know that they don't have to overachieve and put
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 on themself.
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, more student loans are available to students no matter what their background.
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 will allow the family
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 to give
youths
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leisure
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time
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 without pressuring them.
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, educating society on mental illness can help
youths
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 with their study and not be under
pressure
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.
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 help them to achieve more and enjoy their
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time
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. In conclusion,
youth
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 should do more
leisure
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 activities and
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 should help with their study. Parents and the school system should join forces in helping
youths
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 by preventing
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 on their education and encouraging more
leisure
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time
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high expectations
  • academic success
  • future success
  • competitive nature
  • modern education systems
  • top grades
  • prestigious universities
  • high-paying jobs
  • rise of technology
  • social media platforms
  • physical activities
  • relaxation
  • extracurricular demands
  • multiple responsibilities
  • economic factors
  • lower-income families
  • part-time jobs
  • academic pressures
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