Nowadays, children play less with others and this has an impart on their development. What are the reasons for this? Does it have a good or a bad effect on children?
Today, the majority of the
children
are not really interested in playing or spending time with their family members as well as
friends due to
miscellaneous reasons, which I think will affect their development both positively and negatively depending on the circumstances.
First of all, technology has been growing rapidly which is one of the main reasons and impacts on children
's interaction with others
. For instance
, my brother Gantsooj who is only 8 years old and
always spends his free time playing computer games on his desktop. Correct word choice
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Although
it seems no big deal, it really drives his attention and causes addiction in him. In fact, he also
spends hours on TV. As a result
, he does not have many friends as well as
does not interact with people that often which sometimes bothers me so much. In addition
, even though technology has dozens of benefactions, it also
affects the growth of children
's brains such
as loss of memory, lack of ability to comprehend and understand,etc.
Secondly
, the increased number of crime crisis
. Nowadays, there are myriad Fix the agreement mistake
crises
of
crimes which occur almost every single day and because of that parents do not really allow their Change preposition
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children
to spend time with others
especially if you
do not know the person well or if the individual does not look safe. Correct pronoun usage
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For example
, my best friend Anna has two boys, one is 6 years old and the other one is 4 years old. She always teaches her children
to stay away from others
regardless of their ages because of the horrifying incidents which happened previously in the social world. Therefore
, she prefers her kids to play in the house or with different typed
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instead
.
In conclusion, from my perspective, there are numerous reasons when
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why
children
play with others
less which sometimes impacts negatively in
their health but Change preposition
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also
positive
when it comes to their Change the word
positively
safeties
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