Nowadays, children play less with others and this has an impart on their development. What are the reasons for this? Does it have a good or a bad effect on children?

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Today, the majority of the
children
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are not really interested in playing or spending time with their family members
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friends
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miscellaneous reasons, which I think will affect their development both positively and negatively depending on the circumstances. First of all, technology has been growing rapidly which is one of the main reasons and impacts on
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's interaction with
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, my brother Gantsooj who is only 8 years old
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always spends his free time playing computer games on his desktop.
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it seems no big deal, it really drives his attention and causes addiction in him. In fact, he
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spends hours on TV.
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, he does not have many friends
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does not interact with people that often which sometimes bothers me so much.
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, even though technology has dozens of benefactions, it
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affects the growth of
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's brains
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as loss of memory, lack of ability to comprehend and understand,etc.
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, the increased number of crime
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. Nowadays, there are myriad
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crimes which occur almost every single day and because of that parents do not really allow their
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to spend time with
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especially if
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do not know the person well or if the individual does not look safe.
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, my best friend Anna has two boys, one is 6 years old and the other one is 4 years old. She always teaches her
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to stay away from
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regardless of their ages because of the horrifying incidents which happened previously in the social world.
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, she prefers her kids to play in the house or with different
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of toys
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. In conclusion, from my perspective, there are numerous reasons
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children
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play with
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less which sometimes impacts negatively
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their health but
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when it comes to their
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safety
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social skills
  • physical activity
  • communication
  • interaction
  • bonding
  • emotional development
  • cognitive development
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • screen time
  • peer pressure
  • overprotective
  • outdoor spaces
  • play areas
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • socialization
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