Whoever controls the media also controls the opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little that can be done to rectify this. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In the technological era, even a small
information
is quickly available on various sources of
media
. Most
of
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the
peoples
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conceptions and views are modified after viewing the reviews of
people
in the forums. I believe that constant bombarding the controlled flow of
information
on multimedia really affects the opinions of
people
. Every
Media
present needs an income on which it can sustain and provide service. so advertising is one of the
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of income for the
media
. It always shows the ads which are generating more revenue and
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to give more view time slots, which end up
people
believe and increase in sales though these products may not be
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good for society.
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of these ads
shows
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half or false
information
.
For example
, promoting junk foods is not good for society and it
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just
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the health risk in the country
and
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such
kind of promotion should have been avoided.
Furthermore
, the
media
owners do not publish the news
that is
against the wealthy or organisational institutes which may affect the society in a negative way.
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,
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only the positives of any
govermental
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governmental
schemes
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and not discussing the negative ways and challenges
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those schemes will build a wrong perception among the users.
Additionally
,
people
will not find any more detailed reviews or
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in forums that would say negative about the scheme which
wil
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more
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manipulate an individual to believe the news floating around
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the scheme. To conclude, in my opinion, With various social
media
, public forums,
paid
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media
all are established for financial gains so the majority of the
information
that floats around across
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various channels is either controlled or biased and the half
information
moving convinces the
people
to believe in
those news
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which cannot be
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until
majority
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the majority
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of
people
face the issue and take a stand against it.
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