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When someone achieves greatness thanks to an innovation or other breakthrough, it is usually agreed that the individual has a high level of intelligence. Do you think that inborn thinking skills play the main role in the successful life of people? What role does ‘nurtured’ intelligence play in achievements of a successful person?

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In today's society, it is believed that only a
person
 of high intelligence can achieve success in innovation or
other breakthrough
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.
This
 essay will tell you what role innate and nurtured intelligence
play
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in a
person
's
life
 success. I think innate thinking
skills
 and
abilities
 play a major role in a successful
person
's
life
. As innate
abilities
 give an unrealistic boost at the start of your career. We inherit our
abilities
 from our parents and
in particular
 based on these
abilities
 we build our
career
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careers
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 and
life
 in general.
In other words
, we find our place in
life
 through our
abilities
. And what we can do depends on our innate talents. Inborn talents are important in our careers.
However
, nurtured
skills
 are important too. From a young age, we improve and perfect what we were born with. As we improve our
abilities
, the results from them
also
 get better. The role of nurtured
skills
 in our
life
 journey is to improve the results of our efforts. To summarise, nurtured
skills
 and innate
abilities
 are both important to a
person
. You cannot rely on only one of them to have a successful career.
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