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Today, in spite of the scientifically proven necessity of life-long learning, the idea that innate intelligence (thinking skills) is enough to have a successful life is dominating the minds of people. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

#spite #necessity #idea #intelligence #skills #life #minds #people #case
Nowadays, the need
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life-long
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 learning has been scientifically shown beyond doubt,
however
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 some
people
 still believe that an ingrained brilliance plays
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 role in achieving in clover life. The main reason why
people
 believe in their inherited skills is the lack of inspiration for them and their lethargy to learn new
things
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People
 think that their inborn abilities are enough to reach their
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 and there is no need to learn new
things
.
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, students mostly don’t have any desire to study and most of them
fell
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 unmotivated,
this
 case demonstrates the mind and
behavior
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 of
people
 who rely on their inborn abilities all the time. Due to it, most of them strongly believe that improvement does not give results and will not cause any changes in them. In order to solve
this
 kind of problem, punishments for children and parents for not working on certain
things
 can be made. The punishment will force children to do
things
 they are not willing to but the punishment is one of the ways to enhance abilities too.
Moreover
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 it would be better to demonstrate them
majestic
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 individuals, who have made themselves through experience and mistakes. If they see
such
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people
, who are well-known in the world, it will make them motivated to move
further
 and achieve more.
By teaching
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and pass the burden they have made for themselves,
also
 will help to solve the problem. To conclude, relying on only inborn intelligence brings many disadvantages that cause problems,
however
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 it is possible to change
minds
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 of
people
 by demonstrating the actual results of work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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