some people think that it would be better for large companies to move to regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

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a vital role in

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the nations

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nations

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Gross Domestic Product (GDP). Many individuals think big firms should be relocated to outskirts of the city premises. In my

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the demerits. A common

critisization

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civilization

is most employees in large firms as based in downtown

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and they will have to commute all the way to the outskirts.

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goods should be transported to the downtown where they can distribute it to their vendors and cost of transportation will

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up.

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to it, constant watch on these firms will be

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for authorities as they will not have the right facilities to

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mentioned

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above, the main

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merits

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, it provides better work opportunities to the locals.

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the cost of

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maintenance

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large

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sector will reduce and can generate good profits.

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of living in these remote

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cheaper which will attract employees to think about it. And

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further more

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we always see that

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located in city

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always draws a huge amount of

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genuinely

causes heavy traffic if

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are established in remote

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then

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traffic can be cut by half in numbers. To conclude,

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established in rural

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have much better advantages

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there are

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but

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donot

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do not

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think these drawbacks

outweights

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outweighs

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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