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Some people say that spending the national budget on space exploration is a waste of resources. They insist that those funds should be spent on people living on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued, that the universe research funded by the national budget is wasting of funds.
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, proponents of
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this
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 individuals on Earth. I do agree with
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 declaration and in my
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 I am going to list some of the reasons why. It cannot be denied, that space exploration is an inevitable part of
contemporary
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 scientific field and might bring us a vast number of advantages and new discoveries.
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, space missions must cost an extraordinary amount of money, which should be invested differently. Focusing on the particular examples, we are facing climate change issues on daily bases, which is doubtlessly an insurmountable challenge. A higher amount of money should be spent on reducing carbon footprint and carbon neutrality
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.
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, by enhancing renewable energy research.
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society suffers from still increasing
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number of different illnesses and despite pressing money for the universe exploration, the governments should tackle
this
 situation as soon as possible,
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 it may continue raising. Moving to the solutions, investment
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 health research may promote at least slow down
this
 progress.
Additionally
, a number of people around the world have still to deal with a food shortage. Linked to
this
, countries, which have adequate resources, should
instead
 of investing it in the revealing of other species in the universe, supply these countries as much as possible,
for example
 with food supplies. In a nutshell, I reckon society has numerous issues, which require funding. In connection with
this
, spending a budget for a space revealing is wasting the country's sources.
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