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Tests and examinations are a central feature of school systems in many countries. Do you think the educational benefits of testing outweigh any disadvantages?

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School
 evaluations are the main feature of the academic system in various countries. Even though
exams
 give to
students
a
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better comprehension of the studied subject and ,
subsequently
, an enhanced commitment during lectures, I believe that
tests
 cannot cover every inch of the
school
 curriculum and more importantly,
tests
 do not evaluate all
students
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student's
students'
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 true abilities. Examinations have always been the preferred tool to evaluate
students’
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student's
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 academic skills and,
furthermore
, to keep
students
 focus during lectures in order to not fail the aforementioned
tests
.
For instance
, the future job career of a graduate student is indissolubly linked to
its
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 academic career, especially the received grades in specific subjects.
Therefore
, a student will focus on these lectures and, eventually receive high grades in those relevant subjects.
This
 will lead the student in having the chance to choose the wanted job career.
However
, I believe that
tests
 cannot cover every module of the
school
 courses and that
exams
 do not evaluate
students
’ skills properly;
therefore
, I argue that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. Many
students
 know that
usually
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exams
 cover specific parts of the course and what the teacher
believe
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 is relevant to know in order to pass.
Therefore
, because of
this
,
students
 study hard just bits of the modules for the sake of the grade itself than for the sake of showing their abilities.
This
 results
on
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 not evaluating the
students
’ real skills but simply mnemonic study. In conclusion, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages of the
school
 systems’ main tool. I believe that
students
 will show their true abilities if the
school
 system
use
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 non-grade quizzes
instead
 of official
exams
.
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