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Parents want to achieve a balance between family and career but only a few manage to achieve it. What do you think is the reason? Discuss possible solutions and provide examples.

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In our contemporary life, a lot of people struggle with preserving balance across their family and career lifestyle.
Therefore
, they reduce the possibility to gain their ambitions aims. From my perspective,
this
 obstacle mostly may emerge from not mastering time-management skills and perhaps, not having enough
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 for sharing it equally on any aspect of lifestyle. With
this
 in mind, I will disclose the essay with relevant samples and talk over probable obvious points. To commence with, it is an inevitable reality that children take their parents' energy from time to time and undoubtedly, they didn't do it consciously or intentional.
Additionally
, regardless of child-caring, parents in turn may have trouble with the health of their parents.
Hence
, it means that only parenting and looking after their relatives woefully could boost the odds of losing energy in the professional sphere. To be specific, my grandmother had lost her father in World War 2 and because of that she had become lieder against her will and was in charge of her little sisters, daughter, sons and mother. In one word, she dealt with the housekeeper position without realising her dream to be a tailor.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • support systems
  • childcare
  • traditional gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • financial stability
  • flexible working hours
  • remote work options
  • burnout
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