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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays many technologies and methods have developed to make agriculture more efficient. Despite these developments, there are still people suffering from hunger all around the world. Having said that, I believe there are two main causes, improper circumstances for agriculture in these regions and destitution. Possible solutions would be preparing desirable situations for producing
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 in these areas and assistance from wealthier
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. As regards the root causes,
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, in most cases there is not sufficient water for irrigating because of drought and appropriate soil is lacking.
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, these
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 do not have access to the cutting edges in
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 field to make better use of their lands and nearby sources of water and
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 would result in insufficient
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 production.
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, people in these areas are not able to afford enough
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 as they are destitute.
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, governments could not deal with
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 difficulty as they are poor as well. To tackle these issues, one step would be helping these
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 to be able to buy produced crops and eventually
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 from other countries.
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 can be done through the United Nation, as direct assistance, and even as a loan. Another viable solution is improving soil quality and finding reliable sources of water by making use of developments in
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 area. Indeed,
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 would be the governments' responsibility to help their people to make use of developments since they cannot afford new tools. In conclusion, starvation in some countries is due to a lack of enough investments in agriculture and actually is because of poverty. In spite of all contributing factors, proper investments implemented by their government and other
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 can reduce the severity of
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 issue considerably.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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