Many people believe that every individual is responsible for his/ her own healthy lifestyle others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give opinion

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A lot of

people

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think that every

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is responsible for his/her own

healthy

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health

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for

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and for

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improving

well-being

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the well-being

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of his/her lifestyle but others believe that

governments

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should protect all

people

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health

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. I partly agree with

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statement, that

governments

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can be taken some measures

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as every

people

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go to a

sport

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centre every week.

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, everybody can make various sports with

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their own

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decision

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. Both of these viewpoints will be outlined in detail before concluding.76

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with, the damage caused by healthy varies considerably depending on both the human

health

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and body and mental activities. Recent research suggests that focusing on his or her body can be beneficial for

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health

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. Many

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want to be impacted by politicians to develop their body

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but every individual should

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themselves.57

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, it wouldn't be harmful if

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do something for human

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. They should attention

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and import products which they buy,

espacially

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especially

their own productions.

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, when I was a child, I bought tomatoes in

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and I got poisoned after

eating

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, It impacted my

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negatively.

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I tried to get better in a hospital.

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and similar situations can be

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organized

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, every citizen can be

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encouraged

the sports after

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their work as long as giving some money.

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, they contribute to our

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.96 To sum up, considering the solution , if it is globally,

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may apply many different solutions to protect our

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. And at the same time,

people

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who want to have

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good

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can do many various sports.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

269 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

preventative care
lifestyle diseases
public health policies
healthcare accessibility
sedentary lifestyle
nutritional information
government intervention
health education programs
public health campaigns
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Many people believe that every individual is responsible for his/ her own healthy lifestyle others believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give opinion

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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

the number of international conferences in three cities. 1965-2010

In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society but today all modern building look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. Why is this a case? Is it a good or bad thing?

Violence in the media promotes violence in society to what extent do you agree or disagree.

You are preparing an event in the countryside. Write a letter to your friend and ask for help with the arrangements. What the event is. Why the event is being held? What arrangements have already been made? How your friend can help?