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Although many people value public parks, this space could be better used for the other purposes such as residential areas for the ever growing population or to develop business and build economics. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Public
parks
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 are an attraction
of
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 many
people
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 of different ages to visit,
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however
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 there are others who deem that
such
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 space should be better used to build
habitant
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habitat
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 areas for the rising number of locals or companies to develop the economy of the city. In my view, the presence of
aminities
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amenities
 like
parks
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 is essential since it
not
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 only a space where
people
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 can spend their leisure time but
also
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a
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conservation of many ecosystems. Despite its undeniable worth, some
people
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 still hold that sheltering the growing
number of
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population as well as developing the local economy by constructing new accommodations or new businesses should be
favioured
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favoured
 over green spaces.
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, individuals should have plenty of choices when it comes to finding a place to live
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and have the right to secure good jobs in their cities.
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, graduated students who just transited to adult life would prioritise getting
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work and a convenient settlement
whithout
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without
 the need to travel away.
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, some
people
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 believe that these spaces could be better used for other purposes.
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, most locals would
defenitly
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definitely
 crave a place where they can have a quality time after a long day at work or
to
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break the routine. Overall, green spaces provide these
picturisc
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pictures
,
sceneric
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scenic
scenery
scenario
, and relaxing views that the cities' residents need.
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,
in
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on
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 free days families go out so they can
breath
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fresh air and recharge after draining
work days
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workdays
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.
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,
parks
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 usually attract many species that will use it as a shelter from insects
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such
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sich
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such
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 as butterflies to different types of birds,
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 the trees will absorb toxic gases and release oxygen into the air.
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, there are many good reasons why we should protect and value
these kind
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 of facilities. In conclusion, while it is deemed that residential areas and business
buldings
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buildings
 must replace the public
parks
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, I disagree with the above
statment
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statement
 and argue that these public resorts are a breather for many ecosystems, namely humans, animals and plants.

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