Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Music
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has always been wonderful
since
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generations, it is
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argued
that most
people
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believe it brings families, friends, different ages and cultures together.l highly agree with
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opinion and in
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essay
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I will discuss the reasons for my opinion.
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,
music
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is a therapy on its own, sometimes when
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is sad, it is
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preferable to play
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to calm down, playing your
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genre makes
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comfortable and free from anxieties.
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, when my mom is sad she loves playing gospel songs
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she calms down.During holidays , we mostly sit at home and sometimes get
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but when we start playing
music
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the surrounding changes , my grandmother likes to dance and make us laugh a lot. The softest
music
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like jazz and classic massages
one
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's
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and becomes a lullaby to
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ears. My father used to say , that kind of
music
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makes him feel like heaven In my country,
people
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love to celebrate a lot so whenever there is an event we play very loud
music
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then
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we dance , the uninvited guests
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come and we end up becoming
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big happy family enjoying
together
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ourselves together
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.In
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we are different cultures and different tribes but whenever we play
music
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we become
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family and we connect immediately. To sum up,
music
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is medicine, and all other kinds of treatment, u can name them
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therefore
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, it must be played on a daily basis to improve
people
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's moods.It is advisable for
people
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to use
music
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as their own personal
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doctors
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, more especially those that are depressed must try playing their
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musical
sooth
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soothe
the feeling of sadness
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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