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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In
today
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world
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 many of us are under constant
stress
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. A similar pattern has emerged for teenagers over the years.
Stress
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 in
young
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the young
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generation
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 is often related to
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academics, whilst the
previouse
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previous
generations
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 had to face different causes of
stress
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. On one hand, the academic world has become more competitive.
Teenager
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Teenagers
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 are under increasing academic pressure, as education is becoming more
competetive
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competitive
.
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, entry requirements for universities are getting higher and higher.
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, competition for a
limted
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limited
 number of places is increasing in these institutions.
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 results in many teenagers having to work more and harder to achieve their goals of attending university.
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, the type of
stress
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 teenagers experience
today
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 is different to what the previous
generations
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 have experienced. I do not believe that it is fair to say that
today
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's
generation
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 has to deal with more
stress
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.
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, it
appeares
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appears
appeared
 that the nature of
stress
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 has changed. For
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example
, my grandfather had to walk five
kilometers
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 to school, no matter the conditions outside.
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 is something that many
teenager
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teenagers
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today
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 do not have to worry about.
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, as our world has become more developed, many causes of
stress
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 that may have affected the previous
generations
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 are not as relevant
today
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. In conclusion, it
appeares
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appears
 fair to say that an increase in academic pressure, has resulted in an increase in
stress
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 for the young
generation
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.
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, I do not believe that
today
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's
generation
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 is exposed to overall more
stress
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,
comapred
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compared
 to previous
generations
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.
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