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Some people think planning future is a waste of time and people should focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that being concerned about upcoming moments of
life
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 is totally useless, an individual ought to enjoy the current period of
life
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. Admittedly, being in the current period of
time
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 is a good
way
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 to be delighted in
life
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.
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, I believe that working out in the
future
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 is always fruitful and even productive. On the one hand, some factors would help to understand the importance of enjoying presently.
First
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 and foremost is that
people
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 who only focus on their presentations are always happier than those who are concerned about the
future
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. To elaborate,
people
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 having
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 kind of living attitude are always mentally healthy even they spend quality
time
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 with their loved ones which
further
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 leads to healthy relationships.
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, enjoying the day to day
life
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 is considered the best
way
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 of living since in that
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 individuals can celebrate even the small events of their lives which helps to have a sound mind and body.
On the other hand
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, ( it is fairly easy to understand why
future
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 planning is important) there are some worthy factors making it more understandable how planning helps in
life
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.
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, the masses who plan their
future
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, are more concerned about their upcoming
life
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. No doubt, they take more stress but the probability of their success is more than others who do not plan. To be precise,
people
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 who consider planning as a waste of
time
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, are proved to be wrong because planning is even helpful to save the upcoming
time
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 in that
way
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 an individual having
life
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 planning takes less
time
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 to deal( with unforeseen) any upcoming situation in
life
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. To cite an example, planners, having medical insurance would not hesitate in tough/complicated/hard situations because they have invested their
time
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 and money in the
future
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.
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, it can be said that planning is fruitful in ongoing
life
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 or even to succeed in
life
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 ahead. To conclude,
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 sans concerned about
future
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people
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 would live a stressless
life
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, I believe that being futuristic is important for more possibility of the successor to be ready for upcoming challenges of
life
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.
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