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Scientists predict in the near future cars will be driven by computers, not people. Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

#scientists #future #cars #computers #people #development
Most
the
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people
 strongly believe that computer-driven cars will defeat the traditional ones which need drivers to operate. From my point of view, there are two main reasons for
this
, which will bring benefit more than harmfulness to those who sit
on
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 the car. ,
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 come the two primary causes of the movement trend. One is that software
technology
 rapidly develops and appears in all aspects of life. If you randomly surf some newspapers, there exists
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not
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difficulty
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 to find a piece of news about
technology
 initiatives that cover agriculture to business. The other is that the entire world is stepping into the new
technology
 revolution which enables
people
 to switch from manual labour to high-
technologytechnology
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technology technology
 production. Currently, we can work, study and relax without going to school,
workplace
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, or
park
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 ,… All things are possible thanks to
technology
.
Then
 discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 change. On the one hand, the new computer-driven
system
 which is set up by
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 does not able to avoid surprise incidents, if it is out of the predictions of programmers.
However
,
this
 is just a rare situation because before applying to
life
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,
this
system
 experienced strict trials to ensure that
operate
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 smoothly and effectively.
On the other hand
, it brings a safer journey to those who are inside of the car because the
system
 is always accurate and quickly processes problems.
Besides
, the drivers are sometimes drunk or losing their muster that they cannot focus on driving
lead
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 to accidents ,unfortunately. One additional supportive idea is that driverless cars help
people
 save more money
instead
 of paying it to drivers. It is brutally true that
people
 spend a large amount of that to hire a car driver so the new
system
 will help them to keep more money. In a word, it is an indispensable trend that surely comes when the social and
technology
 increasingly expands out of the
people
’s expectation. Anyway,  I can sure that it will bring the cos more than the pros.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Sensors
  • Collision avoidance
  • Alleviate
  • Accidents
  • Efficiency
  • Environmental impact
  • Unemployment
  • Freedom of choice
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