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in some countries the average weight of people is increasing and thier levels of health and fitness are decreasing what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Nowadays , due to advancements in technology and changes in
lifestyle
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 new
problems
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 have arisen in society,
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 as increasing obesity and decreasing the level of health and fitness. There are several reasons for
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 issue and possible solutions.
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 with,
people
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 have become less active than before due to the modern
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 they follow,
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 as using more private vehicles
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 of walking,using more machines to do their tasks or sitting in front of the computers for a long time in their offices. Another important factor is the growth of fast
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 consumption.
people
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's busy
lifestyle
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 forces them to depend on fast foods rather than cooking healthy meals at home , and as these
food
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 are containing so much fat, sugar , salt and atc they cause obesity in society. As we said
people
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's modern
lifestyle
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 forced them to be less active , or solution government must popularising bicycles as a more leading method of transportation in many cities and encourage
people
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 or even forced them to not use their cars for short distances. ,
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 they could increase the number of sports facilities everywhere even at workplaces and encourage employers to do some exercises in their break times. We mention consuming outlet
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 as a
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 problem , for solving these
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 authorities must step forward and monitor packets of
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 and fast
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 items and their ingredients to control the quantity of fat and sugar. The other way that they can solve these
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 is to encourage restaurants and quick
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 courts to cook more healthy
food
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 that includes vegetables , protein , and vitamins
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 as vegetables burgers or pizza. These days we can see more vegan
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 instructions on social media which is a good sign for the
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 generation's health. In brief, it is obvious that many
people
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 are suffering from obesity and health conditions these days , and these
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 are mostly caused by their unhealthy lifestyles there are several things that we can do to fix it. They should have a balanced diet and do more physical activities.
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