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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. -explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - say how your work could be done while you are away - ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Rolinca I am writing
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 letter to express my interest in getting a transfer for six months to the head office located in
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 I will take a lot of courses which can improve our managing skills and teach us some new concepts that can help us break the bottleneck of sales performance. During my absence here, I will make sure that the operation of our sales department will not be affected.I will arrange my work through the internet. The clients of mine will transfer to Johnson who will assist me to
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, regular meetings will be launched by me to review the work outcome using the video meeting. I am very pleased that if you can approve it and help me to create
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. If you see my letter for you , I am looking forward to hearing your reply. Thank you!
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