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Being good at mathematics depends on a person’s natural ability as well as the quality of teaching they receive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that obtaining above-average mathematics knowledge is conditioned by a combination of natural capabilities and the quality of the educational process. I completely agree with
this
 statement, as genetics is the source of our
abilities
, which might be
subsequently
 markedly developed with proper teaching. It cannot be denied, that each person has
different
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 combination of activities, in which he is good
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. Understandably, genetics should be the source of these talents. It is set in our gene code, in which activities we are going to be excellent at and in which not even partially talented, long before we are born. It is based on the genes of our ancestries and their combinations.
This
 might imply that
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 our mathematical
abilities
 belong among features, which are coded in our DNA.
On the other hand
, being talented in something amazing, doubtlessly.
Nevertheless
, natural
abilities
 need to be revealed and
subsequently
 properly guided for their
developing
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.
Besides
 others,
this
 is one of the main aims of the educational process.
Moreover
,
this
 is
also
 the reason why during grammar school we have to come through a vast number of different subjects- to try to find some talent in children.
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 teachers are able to recognize and recommend to children or their parents,
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which activities they might be good or even excellent at. Later on, it lies
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 children's own
interest
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 and parent's support, to develop
this
 talent. In nutshell, to be good at mathematics is conditioned by natural
abilities
, which are given to us, but it can be significantly supported and developed by education.
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