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More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are some possible solutions?

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An increasing number of
people
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 from developing nations are making their first car purchases. The principle
problem
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 causes is
traffic
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 congestion and the most viable solution is better public transport. The primary dilemma developing countries face when their citizens start to buy cars is
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 jams.
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 is because
people
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’s wealth has grown faster than the infrastructure and
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 means that
roads
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 that were built for bikes or a limited number of cars are suddenly clogged with a line of vehicles during peak times. The result of
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 is
people
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 getting stuck in
traffic
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 for a prolonged period of time during rush hour.
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, most
roads
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 in Ho Chi Minh City were built to carry bikes only, but now there are up to 5,000 new cars added to the streets a month and it now takes up to half an hour to travel one kilometre within the city centre. A solution to the
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 of overcrowding on the
roads
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 is to build a sustainable public transport system.
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 could solve the
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 by taking most
people
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 off the
roads
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 and onto either an underground train
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 or a train that runs above the road. As
traffic
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 problems increase, most
people
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 will become frustrated and decide to either sell their car or only use it when absolutely necessary.
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 is why Ho Chi Minh City is currently building their first metro line and sky train, similar to Bangkok’s, and these are projected to reduce journey times by up to 50% when they are completed. In conclusion, the main
problem
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 with the rise in the number of motor vehicles in developing countries is the clogging of the
roads
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, but
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 can be addressed through modern
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 infrastructure.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • carbon emissions
  • air pollution
  • climate change
  • fuel prices
  • imported oil
  • road maintenance
  • public transportation
  • economic inequality
  • societal divide
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