Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

Nowadays career is very crucial to everyone.Many
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education
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future , while
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others
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other
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others
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believe that doing
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is more important after
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school. In
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I will discuss both these views and give my own opinion. On the one hand , Parents believe that earning right after school is good for our future because
,
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you start earning
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your young age that after two or three years you will be the independent.
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, my cousin started his
job
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his matric and now he
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handsome
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salary and
also
he
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a lot of experience.
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,Jobs are very limited and
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good that you find
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in your early life.
On the other hand
,
people
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that
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jobs
after
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intermediate
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or
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bachelor
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bachelors is
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leading to a successful life because you get a
job
with
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position and good
earning
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because of
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degree and many companies hire
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people
. For
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, My sister completed her higher studies in her own country Karachi but after
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her
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an international company offer her a
job
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salary because she has well educated . In conclusion, many
people
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the job
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job
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jobs
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after school because want to be independent
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quite
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small age and
where as
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, many students prefer
job
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jobs
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after completing their higher
education
.I experience the
later
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one because for me completing
education
and
then
doing
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dream
job
is very crucial and leads to a successful career
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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