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In some cities, there are few controls on the design, construction of homes ,office building, and the owners can decide on the styles of their houses. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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It is true that in some parts of the world, there are fewer regulations on the
construction
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 of residential and commercial
buildings
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.
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this
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 trend has some advantages, I personally opine that
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the disadvantages
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 of
absence
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the absence
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 of laws or rules regarding building
design
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 outweigh these advantages. On the one hand,
biggest
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 benefit of
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 trend is that it can enhance the beauty of
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 particular city or place. To explain, when owners have
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the freedom
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 to choose
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design
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 of the
construction
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 they can explore their creativity to architect these
building
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buildings
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 spectacularly.
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, Venice, a city of Italy, is
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a hot
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 spot among tourists only
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 its uniquely constructed
buildings
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.
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, every person has individual needs and they need to build
buildings
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according to
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 their family size or budget. So, forcing them to adopt a pre-determined
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 would be
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 for their economic condition.
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, I think that less control
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design
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the design
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 of homes and offices leads to dangerous repercussions.
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, it would allure the contractors to cut
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the cost
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 of
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 which would compromise the security of residents.
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 poorly designed and constructed
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 are prone to collapse during natural calamities
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 as earthquakes, floods etcetera.
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, during
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the 2012
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 Nepal earthquake many
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buildings
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 were demolished just because of their weak
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. Apart from
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, randomly constructed
buildings
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 encourage people to encroach
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on public
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 land which would result in narrow roads and high traffic congestion. In conclusion,
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 having the freedom to
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building
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buildings
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 is beneficial to some extent, I opine that its disadvantages clearly outnumber the advantages.
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