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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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A part of students
work
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works
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 while studying but
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 causes
the
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 lack of
time
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 for education and the continuity of feeling pressured. The causes might be the lack of budget they have for their personal need and the poor
time
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 management. When people are in need of resources, they will try to find
it
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them
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, and one way to earn money is by working. Having a job while in school or college can be tough, because the intensity of school is already too much for some people,
combined
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 with the pressure of working it will be hard to handle. Some might
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 struggle due to the bad control of the
time
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 they have. Resting is
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 important, students may study or work too much,
that
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 may lead to little sleep and it will make them feel even more tired, have less
time
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 for education, and just not focused in general. While not having an education and a job at the same
time
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 might be one of the
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, some might not be able to afford their living cost. Learning how to manage your
time
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 better will make it easier to not feel the intensity because we can schedule some
time
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 to rest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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