Why do some people who leave school early are more successful compared with those who complete their studies. Discuss both the views and present your opinion.

Nowadays, Some teenagers are more likely to run
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. Some people believe that
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do not go to
school
are more achievable while contrast to whom
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their
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institutions.
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following paragraphs will examine both viewpoints. I personally agree with the former view. On the one hand,
Chidren
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Children
who leave
school
early can find
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themselves
theirselves
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and know which way they are good at. Many of them became
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millionaire
millionaires
even or
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billionaire
at 20.
For example
, Robert T. Kiyosaki the author of rich
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poor dad,
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worked at 9 years old when he understand the value of money.
Then
he left
school
at 16.
Moreover
, He has started a business at 18. Now he
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writer
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and taught everyone all around the world how he is
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was and
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which
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school
did not
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educated
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.
Additionally
, Schooler thinks that academy is
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of their time and money the reason is everything which
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being instructed are not essential in
life
.
Such
as, intense chemical and math
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formulas
formula
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On the other hand
,
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the place where we can learn, make friends, and
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a kid. They confined that institutions polished specific lessons.
For instance
,
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who want to be an astronaut has to
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the science and about the cosmos prior to
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to outer space. Another example, Doctor is the career who has to
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each
viens
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veins
and bones in human body afore to diagnosis patients or surgery cases. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the previous views, sometimes
academy
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is not that vital while in other opinion study is the main
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in
the
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future
opputinities
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opportunities
.
Life
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will be given more when you are left from
school
and face
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society while schools are full of knowledge.
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