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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

#activity #child #skills #creativity
We human beings are creative in nature and most of the time try to remain active by engaging in various
activities
 throughout
life
. There are a certain group of
people
 who believe in doing the same things repeatedly and avoid any change in their daily pattern of engagement, whereas other section prefers to engage themselves in a wide range of
activities
 and are always eager to do experiments to try new. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of
opinion
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. I will strongly support the
second
 option of doing things differently and experiencing newness in everyday
life
.
To begin
 with the one side of opinion on preferring to do similar things
,
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is believing that, these are the
people
 who are living in their comfort zones and risk aversive in nature. They don’t want to disturb their daily schedule and have fear of failure if they will do so. Mostly they are preferring to choose fewer risky jobs
such
 as administrative work where somebody needs to perform similar duties every day. In every
society
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 you will find certain sections of
people
 are falling into
this
 category. Discussing the other side of the opinion,
people
 who take risks generally prefer to try new stuff in their
life
.
This
 may be doing the daily routine
activities
 in different ways and are considered to be more creative compared to the former category of
people
. These
people
 are mostly involved in scientific research, and business-related
activities
 and generally take leadership positions in organizations. A recently published report says that innovators and entrepreneurs are the most active among all professions who are active for 14-16 hours every day to perform different tasks. In conclusion, it can be said that
,
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people
 can be categorized into two major categories based on their risk-taking abilities. Those who are risk aversive in nature are less likely to deviate from daily routine jobs where they are already settled whereas risk takers are always willing to try something new and live an adventurous
life
. Innovators and entrepreneurs are considered to be the best fit for the
second
 category.
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