Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree.
Sweets
is
one of the major taste buds Change the verb form
are
in
Change preposition
on
human
tongue but an excessive Correct article usage
the human
amount
of sugar
intake
could lead to health
problems. Moreover
, many produced food and drink products
were with a substantial amount
of it. Thus
, this
brands should increase their price to encourage Correct determiner usage
these
people
to eat minimal sugar
. This
essay agrees with the statement mentioned above and will discuss the aforementioned.
A considerable health
risk is being considered if sugar
intake
were not controlled, and several products
were produced with a large amount
of sugar
as the main ingredients such
as ice cream, cake, and coke. The excessive intake
of this
Correct determiner usage
these
products
could cause to unbalance
glucose Change the verb form
unbalanced
level
in Fix the agreement mistake
levels
human
body and Add an article
the human
a
potential Remove the article
apply
health
trouble happened,
and will affect the function of the vital organs Remove the comma
apply
such
as heart
, lungs and skin. Correct article usage
the heart
Furthermore
, the immune system will be lessen
, Change the verb form
be lessened
thus
, resulting to
wound not healing faster. Change preposition
in to
For instance
, A study noted that 90% people
diagnosed with diabetes mellitus were the Change preposition
of people
people
who used to eat and drink sweets with
excessive Change preposition
in
amount
Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
everyday
.
Replace the word
every day
On the other hand
, this
product could be consumed minimally by public
if awareness about its Add an article
the public
health
drawbacks, and made it more expensive was insisted. That is
to say that the government could assist with this
matter by the enforcement of law
, and additional tax will be added Add an article
the law
with
the Change preposition
to
products
which has
Change the verb form
have
higher
content of Add an article
a higher
sugar
, in additional
Replace the word
addition
of
society notification about its Change preposition
to
health
risk. For instance
, the coke company has been producing their product with alternative
sweetener named Coke Zero.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
an alternative
this
essay support that high in
sweet substance that was manufactured by food and drink company affects many Change preposition
apply
health
risk
Change to a plural noun
risks
must
Correct word choice
and must
increased
in price to encourage Change the verb form
increase
be increased
people
for
lesser Change preposition
to
sugar
intake
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