Today’s teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is argued that people whose age group between 13 to 19 are having difficult lifestyle compared with preceding
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's. In my
view
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I strongly believe that many
of
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the adolescents are facing challenges
while
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making any decision in their daily routine.
Firstly
in
this
compititive
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competitive
world
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the teenagers are forced to make wrong choices.
For instance
one
of my teened
friend
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friends
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is passionate about choosing his career in photography but he was enforced by his relatives and stepped into
engineering
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an engineering
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course. Despite joined in
one
of the best universities he was unable to excel in his academics and
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challenges to get into
job
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the job
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.
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it took him 2 years to
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an opportunity to work with a corporate company.
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many
of
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the youths are commenting suicide because they are unable to handle the pressure and
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losing
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loosing
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losing
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hope
about
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in
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life.
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, when I was a teenager
one
of my
friend
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friends
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felt stressed
to
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make a good score
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board
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examination and unfortunately he
was
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failed. Thinking that he was not deserved to have
an
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horrible life and committed suicide. In conclusion, teenagers need to follow their own passion and
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