Today’s teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is argued that people whose age group between 13 to 19 are having difficult lifestyle compared with preceding
one
's. In my view
I strongly believe that many Add a comma
,view
of
the adolescents are facing challenges Change preposition
apply
while
making any decision in their daily routine.
Correct word choice
when
Firstly
in this
compititive
Correct your spelling
competitive
world
the teenagers are forced to make wrong choices.Add a comma
,world
For instance
one
of my teened friend
is passionate about choosing his career in photography but he was enforced by his relatives and stepped into Change to a plural noun
friends
engineering
course. Despite joined in Add an article
an engineering
one
of the best universities he was unable to excel in his academics and facing
challenges to get into Wrong verb form
faced
job
. Add an article
the job
a job
Moreover
it took him 2 years to Add a comma
,Moreover
got
an opportunity to work with a corporate company. Change the form of the verb
get
Secondly
many Add a comma
,Secondly
of
the youths are commenting suicide because they are unable to handle the pressure and Change preposition
apply
Replace the word
losing
loosing
hope Correct your spelling
losing
about
life. Change preposition
in
For example
, when I was a teenager one
of my friend
felt stressed Change to a plural noun
friends
to
make a good score Change preposition
about
in
Change preposition
on
board
examination and unfortunately he Correct article usage
the board
was
failed. Thinking that he was not deserved to have Unnecessary verb
apply
an
horrible life and committed suicide.
In conclusion, teenagers need to follow their own passion andChange the article
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite