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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think is a positive or negative development?

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There has been a drastic debate over whether is good or not for
countries
 to become more and more similar due to people being able to buy the same
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 anywhere. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both these views and give my own opinion on the matter.
Firstly
, I will explore the way
this
 innovation has changed the way human beings have similar products and
secondly
, I will share the drawbacks of
this
 trend.
To begin
 with, my attitude towards it is positive, I believe the case of
this
 can be beneficial. In
this
 case where we can buy the same products anywhere in a kind of globalization. In
this
 situation, we can benefit a lot from it. 1st opinion, it will help to narrow the gaps between rich
state
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 and poor
state
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. Poor
state
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 derive the right to buy commodities as same as the rich ones.
In addition
, buying the same products anywhere is able to promote competition among the retailers, which can not only lower the price of goods but
also
 better the quality.
Besides
,
this
 kind of change will affect the other
countries
' economies. Because of ,
this
 some
countries
 became powerful. For, example if every nation has the same machinery it will directly impact export and import. In
this
 process, it has a possibility for different
countries
 to tighten their connection and strengthen communication, resulting in efficiency enhanced. Considering all of the facts, I imagine that
this
 kind of fusion of market is positive, not only can it benefit customers, but
also
 do well for the whole market. We are able to insist on globalization can all
countries
 profit from it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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