Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think is a positive or negative development?

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has been a drastic debate over whether is good or not for

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more and more similar due to people

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able to buy the same

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anywhere. In

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essay, I will discuss both these views and give my own opinion on the matter.

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innovation has changed the way human beings

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have similar

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trend.

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with, my attitude towards it is positive, I believe the case of

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can be beneficial. In

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case where we can buy the same

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anywhere in a kind of globalization. In

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situation, we can benefit a lot from it. 1st opinion, it will help to narrow the gaps between rich

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and poor

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. Poor

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derive

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to buy commodities as same as the rich

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, buying the same

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anywhere is able to promote

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competition among the retailers, which can not only lower the price of goods

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better the quality.

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economics. Because of

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some

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example

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if every nation

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same

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will direct impact on the export and import. In

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process, it has a possibility for different

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to tighten their connection and strengthen communication, resulting in efficiency enhanced. In conclusion, I imagine that

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kind of fusion of market is positive, not only can it benefit customers, but

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do well

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the whole market. We are able to insist on globalization can all

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profit from it.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

globalization
diversity
homogenization
cultural assimilation
global connection
local businesses
economic impact
consumerism
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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think is a positive or negative development?

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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according to some recent research rates for committing crime after a criminal's release are concerning at such high numbers, although unspecified.

Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good while others think there disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.