Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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technology

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advances had great impacts on the world of work. Automatic machines are able to do most of the

works

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، so It has been widely debated that working

hours

should be reduced. I

am completely agree

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that governments should set plans to lessen working

hours

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thus

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citizens with better quality of life.

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of all, in my

opinion

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employees

need more

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relaxation

to have

better

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focus on the

job

untill

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should be occupied

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human

employees

since Automation is not so reliable

certain

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procedures during work , so with more

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they will

able

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to have more focus on every step they do in their work.

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what

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that

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decreasing working

hours

may help reduce stress on families as well as

community

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the community

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as a whole. In today's

job

world, a big proportion of their daily life occupied with

job

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the job

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and commuting, that considerably affected their ability to look after their family

especially

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their

chirldren

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children

. Reducing working

hours

will give

employees

more time to spend with their families.

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, decreasing working

hours

may help more people to find jobs. in today's world unemployment rates considerably

rises

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day by day, so more and more people get unemployed, I think one immediate solution to help decrease unemployment is to reduce working

hours

. some countries have already tried

this

such

germany

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and japan. To conclude, since machines can do most of

jobs

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the jobs

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today so reducing working

hours

Have great advantages,

for

example

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Less working

hours

can help families to have

better

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relationship,

employees

would have greater attention while working and that can help more people to find a

job

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Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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