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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think they can find a
way
 to live when the
climate
 changed. Since any
climate
 change may have severe consequences and humankind cannot cope with it, I completely disagree with
this
 statement, and I think there is no
way
 to live when you destroy the
earth
.
Firstly
, salvaging the global
climate
 is a challenging task, and almost we cannot do anything when our planet undergoes disruptive changes. We should consider that the
earth
 is the only home that we have, and
hence
, it is impossible to move to another planet in the near future.
Furthermore
, if humans do not find any
way
 to stop manipulating the
climate
, they will not be able to live here. But if we take care of the
earth
 and let
earth
 rescue itself, everything will return to its place within a few months. As, during the pandemic, some parts of the ozone layer
recovered
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. In conclusion, In many cases, always preventing is better than the cure.
On the other hand
,
climate
 changes affect
consequently
 on the different parts of the ecosystem. It has a lot of complex subsystems which affect other parts, and in many cases, we can not find out how they operate.
For example
, suppose the polar ice
are
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 destroyed. In that case, the level of water in the seas will rise, and there is a probability that many cities will drown, or if the ozone layer gets thinner, it may have adverse effects on agriculture.
Therefore
, we should take care of the
earth
;
nevertheless
, any change in the ecosystem and
climate
 might have serious consequences that we may not find any solid solution for it. In conclusion, finding a new
way
 of living when the
climate
 has been changed is somehow unpractical because every change may have domino effects, and we do not have sufficient knowledge for salvaging and controlling these changes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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