Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers.Others believe that a women's role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice
Every
Person
has to be treated equally and given the same amount of opportunity regardless of race, gender and status. Limiting people to a certain type of duty Fix capitalization
person
not
just cruel,but Add a missing verb
is not
creating
serious economic problems as well. Wrong verb form
creates
Thus
i
have been convinced that Change the capitalization
I
women
should have opportunity
to pursue their dreams to Correct article usage
the opportunity
fullest
potential .
Correct pronoun usage
their fullest
First
of all, limiting women
to only house
jobs was cruel and it also
stripped freedom from ladies as well.For example
,forcing women
to work only in the house
will Change the verb form
be made
made
the Change the form of the verb
make
women
financially depending
on Replace the word
dependent
her
husbands, Correct pronoun usage
their
thus
limited
Wrong verb form
limiting
her
freedom. Correct pronoun usage
their
Also
,forcing someone to do only
certain Add an article
an only
type
of jobs it's considered inhumane. What if Fix the agreement mistake
types
that
Change the determiner
that woman
those women
women
didn't like the works
of Fix the agreement mistake
work
house care
, but she was forced to do it because of her gender. That's why in my opinion Correct your spelling
housecare
this
action is cruel and inhumane.
In addition
, The economic problem will be enormous if women
role were only permitted to Change noun form
women's
taking
care of the Wrong verb form
take
house
. For instance
, imagine if half of the country
population doesn't have income and Change noun form
country's
only
skill Correct article usage
the only
their
provide was Correct pronoun usage
they
house
taking. The country would have only limited workforces, very few portions of Correct article usage
the populations
populations
that were paying taxes and at Fix the agreement mistake
population
last
almost half of the population that the governments needed to support. As a
result
Add a comma
,result
limited
the roles of Wrong verb form
limiting
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
women
a woman
women
was never the
reasonable decision.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
a
As
we Correct word choice
apply
seen
the downside of restricting Add the auxiliary verb
saw
have seen
women
roles in society both moral and economic. Change noun form
women's
This
make
the idea of forcing Change the verb form
makes
a roles
Correct the article-noun agreement
roles
a role
to
Change preposition
on
a specific genders
Correct the article-noun agreement
a specific gender
specific genders
is
unacceptable. Luckily, as we have progressed toward Unnecessary verb
apply
21st
century these Correct article usage
the 21st
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
idea
were starting to Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
faded
away ,Change the verb
fade
thus
I believed that sooner or later we will be able to created
Change the verb
create
the
society where an opportunity Correct article usage
a
were
given equally.Change the verb form
was
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