Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages and disadvantages.

As
time
flows, modernization occurs, which forces every aspect of human life to go digital. Home routine can not stand as an exception, but does
this
procedure bring advantages or disadvantages to
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. One evident benefit of
people
going digital is surely
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economy. In the past,
people
used to spend so much
time
on
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doing housework neglecting the needs of other
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.
However
, nowadays
people
dedicate more
time
to more important things
such
as family and self-development.
In addition
, modernization of home routine is one of the activities that cannot be escaped,
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as
people
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all of their surroundings into technology. For
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, self-navigating cleaners and so on.
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disadvantage of having your home
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digital. When machines
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in
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action, they might become overeliable on technology, and lose
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own.
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people
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to wash dishes, because of the overusing the dishwasher machine.
Besides
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human attention is way more useful. For
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, now more and more law listeners, the ones who
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-process, quit their jobs,
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because
this
profession getting digitalized.
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,
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recorder contains all
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of sounds, could it be some
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in human speech can be recognized by no one, but
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. In conclusion, both cases, going digital or not seem to have
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pros and cons, but I feel that digitalizing must occur.
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  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
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