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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

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Sugar is undoubtedly one of the most harmful food ingredients when consumed more than recommended potion - which is often the case in our daily diet. To reduce the sugar-rich food and
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 intake, many recommend making them more expensive, and I believe that
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 sugar-packed products should be expensive to promote public
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. Despite the common myth of the
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 benefits of sugar, scientists and nutritionists suggest that they are addictive, and are slow poison. Fast foods and sugary foods and
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 like soft
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, desserts, ice-creams, and sodas come cheap and are ready to be consumed without any effort.
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 is why they have become so popular, and from children to the elderly, everyone loves those sugary foods and
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. But these are known to cause serious diseases like diabetes and heart diseases and are connected to obesity. Since they are linked to so many unexpected
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 diseases and deaths, the authority should impose taxes, directly and indirectly, on those sugary
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 to make them unaffordable to mass
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 and in the process improve public
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.
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,
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 often opt for food and
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 that are cheap and easily available. And if we only look at the departmental stores around us, we can notice that we have sugary
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 all around us, and they are affordable. So to restrict sugar intake, their prices should be increased via direct and indirect taxes. If they are made more expensive,
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 will reduce their consumption and go for more healthy alternatives.
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, if a healthy meal costs $5 while a sugary junk meal $10, most
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 will go for the cheaper and better option. It will gradually but surely improve public
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 and reduce medical care expenses both for the government and ordinary citizens. To conclude, imposing higher taxes on sugary
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 will bring about many benefits and reduce the cost of healthcare. It is
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 expected that the authority will take steps to make sugar-packed
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 expensive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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