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Ending the world’s reliance on fossil fuels will be a positive development (agree/disagree)

Today’s society overwhelmingly depends on fossil
fuels
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 in everyday life unknowingly.
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, electricity, manufacturing and transportation. With the limited of fossil
fuels
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 in modern days, many governments invented and developed
alternative
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resources
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 to end our reliance on them. I believe that
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 will be a positive development for the environment and people’s well-being.
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, fossil
fuels
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 cause many negative impacts on the surroundings,
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, oil and gas for transportation
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 as
cars
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, busses, planes and trains cause pollution to the environment which is one of the main reasons for global warming and climate change. With less use of fossil
fuels
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, air quality and people’s health will be significantly improved.
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, there are many other
alternative
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resources
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 which are more sustainable,
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 as renewable energies.
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, many countries in the world,
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 as Thailand mainly rely on fossil
fuels
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 as the main resource in many industries as it is more accessible and relatively cheaper than other sources,
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, solar panels for electricity can cost a lot more to install and maintain than normal electricity from coal.
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, in some countries, technologies and the development of other
resources
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 are still not available,
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,
cars
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 with EV chargers are more expensive than
cars
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 using gas or oil and inadequate charging station in public places. If there were more charging stations available, people would use more electrical
cars
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. In conclusion, I completely agree that ending the world’s reliance on fossil
fuels
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 with
alternative
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resources
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 will be positive growth for societies by improving people’s health and the environment.
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, many countries still need to develop
alternative
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resources
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 to become more accessible.

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