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Some expert believe that it is better for children to start learning a foreign language in elementry school and not in high school. Do you agree or disagree with statement ?

#expert #children #language #elementry #school
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It is often
agrued
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argued
agreed
 by many people that it is more beneficial if
foreign
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language
 is taught to
children
 in primary
school
 rather than in higher grades.
However
, I completely agree with
this
 notion and I strongly opine that secondary languages should be introduced at
junior
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 level only
instead
 of
secondary
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in secondary
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 schools.
Firstly
, students in
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elementary
school
 can grasp much faster
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compared to higher grade pupils. Teaching a foreign
language
 at
primary
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 level will enhance their learning capabilities and will help them to score better in
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academics.
For instance
, in a recent study done in
Korea
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 it was found that
children
 who learned
english
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English
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 along with their native
language
 were able to score better marks in subjects
such
 as Mathematics and Science compared to those who did not show any interest in learning a secondary dialect.
Hence
, educational institutes must introduce secondary
language
 along with
thier
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their
 mother tongue at
early
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 stages of
school
 for the betterment of a child's future.
Secondly
, learning a foreign
language
 at an early age will definitely improve the vocabulary and speaking skills of the
children
.One of the best
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 proving
this
 fact can be seen in Norway where
children
 are taught English along with their native
language
 at junior schools.
Consequently
, pertaining to
this
 most of the adults in Norway speak
english
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 at a very advanced level.
Therefore
, if other dialects are taught in the elementary
school
 it will be highly beneficial for the students from the future point of view when they might opt
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 for higher education overseas. To, conclude both the native
language
 and
foreign
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language
 should be included in the study curriculum of
children
 in
the
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primary schools. I firmly believe, that
this
 will be highly advantageous for students from
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 point of view and it will open a wide horizon of possibilities for them in future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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