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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In the
last
decades
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 digital technology slowly has received many
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 of our life including journalism and book editing.
Although
,
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 many
people
 predict a future without
books
 and
newspapers
, some of them still believe that
,
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 even the online information is free the traditional writing has to remain. In spite of my admiration for
books
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 I strongly believe that
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digital technology is the future of human society. Due to technological advancement and their affordability more and more
people
 use
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online reading
in
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detriment
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the detriment
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 of paper printed
books
 and
newspapers
. In human
history
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writing met many stages of progress from the stone graving in
ancient
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 world
till
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Internet
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the Internet
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 in our days.
This
 development is unstoppable and irreversible and is going to continue in the future too.
For instance
, nowadays
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tablet use is more and more promoted in schools and every newspaper
have
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online
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 page too.
Moreover
, online reading is comfortable, flexible and abounds in information.
For example
, meanwhile are travelling,
people
 can read the news from their phones, without carrying
newspapers
 or
books
 with them.
Also
,
informations
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 in printed
newspapers
 are limited
in contrast
with
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 the Internet, which contains a great amount of it.
In
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 the other hand, despite
of
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many advantages of online reading, some
people
 are
old- fashioned
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 and
they
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prefer traditional reading, claiming that printed
books
 have their value and should not be totally replaced. In conclusion, despite
of
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the very long tradition of printed writing, due to technological advancement, affordability and comfort
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online reading gradually replaces
the
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paper printed
books
 and
newspapers
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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