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One of the major issues facing the world today is overpopulation. What Problem arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

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Globally,
overpopulation
 become an area of attention. As the matter of fact
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over population
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 has created some serious
issues
 for
the
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human civilizations and
global
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 environment. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the problems which are created due to it and some possible solutions to manage
it
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out
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. In
this
 era,
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overpopulation
 become a serious challenge for
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human civilization and for
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nature.
Firstly
 “High
Consumptions
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Consumption
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 of Natural
Resources
” created some serious
climate
 change
issues
 globally. Few of the natural
Resource
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Resources
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 towards the end due to which world
faces
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 some
climate
 change
issues
 like Flooding, Warm
Weathers
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Weather
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 and Cyclones become really common. The
continents
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continent's
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 boundaries are shrinking and nations are
in
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 “war” with each other to get the natural
resources
of
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each
other’s
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.
Secondly
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 the
literacy
rate
 of the nations
also
 declined. Government budgets and
resources
 are extremely limited due to those
peoples
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people
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are
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not getting
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a basics
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basics
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 education which is their major right.
For example
, Mexico is
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country
, which is facing some serious
problem
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problems
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 due to
overpopulation
.
Peoples
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 are consuming the natural
resources
 due to
it
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the
climate
 change happened and flooding, heavy rains and land sliding become very come. Their
literacy
rate
also
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 in decline due to
that
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the crime
rate
increases
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 across the
country
.
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 challenge
un-stabilize
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 the
country
,
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it’s
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neighbor’s
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 countries and
also
 has
impact
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 globally.
Overpopulation
 created some serious challenges which
destroying
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peace and human lives.
On the other hand
, these problems can be overcome or resolved. Proper Regulations and strict policies from the government can help us to bind the
peoples
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people
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 to use the natural
resources
 carefully and protect the nature.
Also
 enforced the E- Green concept across their countries.
On the other hand
, Government should review their education policies and make the criteria of minimum education for the
peoples
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people
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 and
also
 provide
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interest free
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 loan
towards
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 the citizen to improve
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literacy
 across the
country
.
For instance
, China makes some extraordinary initiatives that help them to cope with the declining
Literacy
rate
 and Natural
resources
consumptions
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consumption
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. The introduces strict policies and legislation which force their citizen and companies to opt the alternative
resources
. To sum up my essay,
Overpopulation
 created some serious
issues
 which created some living challenging problems for human beings and animals but it can be sorted out with some serious initiatives and compliances. Some initiatives which we discussed in
this
 essay can play a vital role in getting
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better lives for us and for upcoming generations and can create
a peace
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peace
a feeling of peace
a sense of peace
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 across the globe and
better
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climate
.
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