The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only government action can solve this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
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from
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move to big
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shortage of housing. In
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government is the only one to tackle
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has the main responsibility to have sufficient housing in commercial
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to prevent unnecessary side
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. The main reason that causes the shortage of housing in
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is increasing the population day by day who migrate from
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to work as the daily workers
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in construction sectors and many industries.
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are moving to
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which offer
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greater employment and
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standard of living.
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life can access
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, mobile banking,
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transportation system.
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, accommodation places are more and more demanding
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for
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workers who can only afford
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budget
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.
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has been occurred
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shortage and electricity
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by hourly.
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, accommodation and domestic
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supply cannot be separated in urban life. If the population and urban
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system ratio
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not equal, there will be many
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health
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cannot use sufficient
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amount for their
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and sanitation purposes. Another particular
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of big city life is
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good
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and management system of household waste. If the governments cannot control daily waste, the diseases
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and flu can be spread easily. In
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have to spend extra charges for their health. To prevent the
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mentioned above,
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of the nation can be solved the
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because they have
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to support to be a developed country and it requires
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amount of money to build sufficient housing in
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cities
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • public housing
  • overcrowding
  • affordable housing
  • rent control
  • property market
  • infrastructure development
  • sustainable living
  • rural-urban migration
  • real estate regulations
  • zoning laws
  • bureaucracy
  • gentrification
  • economic disparity
  • housing policy
  • social welfare
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