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People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

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Unarguably,
crime
 is flourishing in every corner of the globe. Today individuals not only are
treated
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in their social environments but even inside their own safe shelters. As
this
 trend already is a problem for the world should be tackled with solutions like governments' useful efforts and vanishing unemployment.
This
 essay will explain remedies and causes in detail.
Firstly
,in many
nations
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crime
 rates
soars
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 only because of the not enough attention and efforts given by countries' high authorities. The lack of
police
 sources and corrupt
police
 could be one of the main causes of lawlessness. Henceforth, criminals may more freely commit crimes and treat citizens. Along
with
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, scandal often happens
as a result
 of the loss of jobs. Unemployment could lead even educated individuals to commit various crimes. The financial burden and lots of free time can force people to attack homes or commit robbery.
Thus
 these practices may cause unsafety for regular people. to
compat
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compete
 with citizens'
overall
 security, governments can detect a bigger budget for tackling
crime
 rates. The government are able to control
this
 issue with simple actions ranging from training accurate
low
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 officers and making many
police
 departments. As well authorities could create jobs and employ youth and degree holders.
This
 sort of investment in people may lead to the country's economic growth and more secure citizens. In conclusion, we can say that with the high rank of
crime
 over the globe nations
feels
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 insecure; there are some causes
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this
 which could be tackled by creating work and improving
crime
 prevention factors
such
 as a better
police
 force.
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