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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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In the beginning, living in the urban
areas
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 is fascinating for each individual but
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 condition has some difficulties to living in the rural
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, and to mitigate some issues like environmental programs needs to take some measures through the government and followed by
people
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.
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 of all, it's not hidden that living in urban
areas
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 is more interesting compete to living in a village and it's obvious that
people
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 who are living in urban get more facilities
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 as public transportation and the internet and easily reach to get everything that they need but the consequence of
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 available options they are struggling with vital issues,
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, some mental disease and Lake of calmness. The
people
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 who
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living
 in urban
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almost
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 stuck in traffic congestion daily which
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 disaster situation will affect
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apply
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their health and will cause mental disease
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 situation should be controlled by the government and make some
decision
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 in order to prevent unknown problems.
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,
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 who live in urban have less access to fresh air and almost
breathing
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 polluted air which in order to struggle with
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 issue the government should take strong rules
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 as increasing the number of public transportation and
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 strict bans
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 using private vehicles and implement
odd-even
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the odd-even
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 rule for tackling with
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 situation.
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