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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

#rise #country #benefit #cities #areas
In the beginning, living in the urban
areas
 is fascinating for each individual but
this
 condition has some difficulties to living in the rural
areas
, and to mitigate some issues like environmental programs needs to take some measures through the government and followed by
people
.
First
 of all, it's not hidden that living in urban
areas
 is more interesting compete to living in a village and it's obvious that
people
 who are living in urban get more facilities
such
 as public transportation and the internet and easily reach to get everything that they need but the consequence of
this
 available options they are struggling with vital issues,
for instance
, some mental disease and Lake of calmness. The
people
 who
livivbg
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living
 in urban
areas
almost
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 stuck in traffic congestion daily which
this
 disaster situation will affect
on
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their health and will cause mental disease
which
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this
 situation should be controlled by the government and make some
decision
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 in order to prevent unknown problems.
Moreover
,
people
 who live in urban have less access to fresh air and almost
breathing
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 polluted air which in order to struggle with
this
 issue the government should take strong rules
such
 as increasing the number of public transportation and
make
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 strict bans
for
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 using private vehicles and implement
odd-even
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the odd-even
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 rule for tackling with
this
 situation.
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