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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

#people #home #workplace #place
In my point of ,view clean house
are
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 good for our physical as well as mental health. Well maintained house is equally important as well maintained office. If we talk about the brighter side of cleanliness
then
,
first
 of all
of all
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we say that it increases our reputation,
,
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secondly
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 it boosts our confidence level and ,
finally
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 it gives us positive energy which is very useful for our concentration. If you visit the school or the hospital ,
first
 of
all
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 that area’s clean atmosphere attracts us. These
site
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 are always tidy because the immunity of children as well as patients
are
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week
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weak
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 as
compare
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 to normal
person’s
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. It means clean places help us to get healthy. If you keep all the things in
there
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 places
then
 it
also
save
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 your time which you may
spent
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 to find those things which
are not keep
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 in
there
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their
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 places. One study
also
tell
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 us if one person
sleep
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 in
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neet
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 and clean
place
 and another in
dirty
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place
then
 the
first
 person
get
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 better sleep as well as
he
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is more energetic
then
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 the
second
 one. The only drawback to
clean
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 your
place
 is that it is a
time consuming
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 process.
Now days
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 all of us do the hectic jobs and
some time
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 it’s difficult to clean the
place
 after
finish
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finishing
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 our work or clean our home when we come from the office at night. In my conclusion
to make
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 our
place
 clean is necessary for our healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 it
also
 gives us more energy to do
your
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 work more efficiently and
also
give
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 us positive energy.
Some times
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 it’s difficult to do but when we make it our habit
then
 it is not difficult for us.
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  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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