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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

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In my point of ,view clean house
are
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 good for our physical as well as mental health. Well maintained house is equally important as well maintained office. If we talk about the brighter side of cleanliness
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 of all
of all
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we say that it increases our reputation,
,
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secondly
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 it boosts our confidence level and ,
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finally
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 it gives us positive energy which is very useful for our concentration. If you visit the school or the hospital ,
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 of
all
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 that area’s clean atmosphere attracts us. These
site
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 are always tidy because the immunity of children as well as patients
are
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week
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weak
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 as
compare
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 to normal
person’s
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. It means clean places help us to get healthy. If you keep all the things in
there
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 places
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 it
also
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save
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 your time which you may
spent
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 to find those things which
are not keep
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are not kept
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 in
there
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 places. One study
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tell
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 us if one person
sleep
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 in
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neet
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neat
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 and clean
place
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 and another in
dirty
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place
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then
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 the
first
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 person
get
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 better sleep as well as
he
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is more energetic
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then
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 the
second
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 one. The only drawback to
clean
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cleaning
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 your
place
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 is that it is a
time consuming
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 process.
Now days
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 all of us do the hectic jobs and
some time
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sometimes
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 it’s difficult to clean the
place
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 after
finish
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finishing
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 our work or clean our home when we come from the office at night. In my conclusion
to make
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making
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 our
place
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 clean is necessary for our healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 it
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 gives us more energy to do
your
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our
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 work more efficiently and
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give
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 us positive energy.
Some times
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 it’s difficult to do but when we make it our habit
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 it is not difficult for us.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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